Loglines, am I right?
Those pesky one-sentence summations of your entire story you use to entice
publishers into buying your manuscript or wow producers into buying your
screenplay, readers into reading your novel or audiences into watching your
movie. But what makes a good logline, and how do you craft yours?
Loglines
are a necessary evil because they prove that you, the writer, have a firm grasp
on what your story is really all about at its core after everything else of
lesser value and consequence is stripped away. I know it’s hard, but if you
cannot summarize your entire story into one simple sentence then you, my
friend, have some work to do.
A
rule of thumb is that a good logline consists of three primary ingredients: 1.
the Protagonist; 2. the Goal of the protagonist; and 3. the Obstacle preventing
the protagonist from achieving their goal.
I
could list numerous examples of logline formulas, but Google exists and I
believe it’s best to lead by example. And because what will probably become the
highest grossing movie in present history has just released (Avengers: Endgame)
I figured why not list the loglines of all the movies in the Marvel Cinematic
Universe to present date. Read them over, dismantle them, and see what makes
them work (and more importantly what doesn’t).
IRON MAN (2008): After
being held captive in an Afghan cave, billionaire engineer Tony Stark creates a
unique weaponized suit of armor to fight evil.
THE INCREDIBLE HULK (2008): Bruce Banner, a scientist on the run from the U.S. Government, must find a cure for the monster he turns into whenever he loses his temper.
IRON MAN 2 (2010): With
the world now aware of his identity as Iron Man, Tony Stark must contend with
both his declining health and a vengeful mad man with ties to his father’s
legacy.
CAPTAIN AMERICA : THE FIRST AVENGER (2011): Steve Rogers, a
rejected military soldier, transforms into Captain America after taking a dose of a “Super-Soldier serum,”
but being Captain America comes at a price as he attempts to take down a war
monger and a terrorist organization.
THOR (2011): The powerful
but arrogant god Thor is cast out of Asgard to live amongst humans in Midgard
(Earth), where he soon becomes one of their finest defenders.
THE AVENGERS (2012): Earth’s
mightiest heroes must come together and learn to fight as a team if they are
going to stop the mischievous Loki and his alien army from enslaving humanity.
IRON MAN 3 (2013): When
Tony Stark’s world is torn apart by a formidable terrorist called the Mandarin,
he starts an odyssey of rebuilding and retribution.
THOR: THE DARK WORLD
(2013): When Dr. Jane Foster gets cursed with a powerful entity known as the
Aether, Thor is heralded of the cosmic event known as the Convergence and the
genocidal Dark Elves.
CAPTAIN AMERICA : THE WINTER SOLDIER (2014): As Steve Rogers
struggles to embrace his role in the modern world, he teams up with a fellow
Avenger and S.H.I.E.L.D agent, Black Widow, to battle a new threat from
history: an assassin known as the Winter Soldier.
GUARDIANS OF THE GALAXY
(2014): A group of intergalactic criminals must pull together to stop a
fanatical warrior with plans to purge the universe.
AVENGERS: AGE OF ULTRON
(2015): When Tony Stark and Bruce Banner try to jump-start a dormant
peacekeeping program called Ultron, things go horribly wrong and it’s up to
Earth’s mightiest heroes to stop the villainous Ultron from enacting his
terrible plan of humanity’s extinction.
ANT-MAN (2015): Armed with
a super-suit with the astonishing ability to shrink in scale but increase in
strength, cat burglar Scott Lang must embrace his inner hero and help his
mentor, Dr. Hank Pym, plan and pull off a heist that will save the world.
CAPTAIN AMERICA : CIVIL WAR (2016): Political involvement in the
Avengers’ affairs causes a rift between Captain America and Iron Man.
DOCTOR STRANGE (2016):
While on a journey of physical and spiritual healing, a brilliant neurosurgeon
is drawn into the world of the mystic arts to become the Sorcerer Supreme.
SPIDER-MAN: HOMECOMING
(2017): Peter Parker balances his life as an ordinary high school student in Queens with his superhero alter-ego Spider-Man, and finds himself on the
trail of a new menace prowling the skies of New York City .
GUARDIANS OF THE GALAXY
VOLUME 2: (2017): The Guardians struggle to keep together as a team while
dealing with their personal family issues, notably Star-Lord’s encounter with
his father the ambitious celestial being Ego.
THOR: RAGNAROK (2017):
Thor is imprisoned on the planet Sakaar and must race against time to return to
Asgard and stop Ragnarök, the destruction of his world, at the hands of the
powerful and ruthless villain Hela.
BLACK PANTHER (2018): T’Challa,
heir to the hidden but advanced kingdom of Wakanda , must step forward to lead his people into a new future while
confronting a challenger to his throne from his country’s past.
AVENGERS: INFINITY WAR
(2018): The Avengers and their allies must be willing to sacrifice all in an
attempt to defeat the powerful Thanos before his blitz of devastation and ruin
puts an end to the universe.
ANT-MAN AND THE WASP
(2018): As Scott Lang balances being both a Super Hero and a father, Hope van
Dyne and Dr. Hank Pym present an urgent new mission that finds the Ant-Man
fighting alongside The Wasp to uncover secrets from their past.
CAPTAIN MARVEL (2019):
Carol Danvers becomes one of the universe’s most powerful heroes when Earth is
caught in the middle of a galactic war between two alien races.
AVENGERS: ENDGAME (2019):
After a grave course of events wipes out half of all life in the universe, the
remaining Avengers assemble to take one final stand against the perpetrator:
Thanos.
As
an end note, some of these loglines are wonderful in their simple details while
others are, well, bleh because of
their vagueness. When crafting your logline, try to be as concise as possible.
KEYWORD: concise. “Fighting evil” is too ambiguous a descriptor for the
antagonist as well as the protagonist’s goal. My dog is “evil” every time she
gnaws on one of my shoes. Some of these loglines can get away with such
vagueness because they belong to billion-dollar blockbusters millions of people
have watched and love. Us no-names aren’t so lucky.
Case
in point: If I told you my story is about a guy who wants to kill a shark, that
could describe any number of movies. But if I told you an aquaphobic sheriff
must kill a giant man-eating shark to stop it from terrorizing the local
swimmers then you know I’m talking about JAWS.
A
boxer fights for the title? Could be a whole slew of boxing movies. But a
small-time boxer who gets a once in a lifetime chance to fight the world
heavyweight champ in a bout in which he strives to go the distance for his
self-respect? Now we’re talking ROCKY.
A
boy who fights evil? Could be anyone doing practically anything. But a spirited
farm boy who joins the rebel forces to save a princess and the galaxy from the
Empire’s planet-destroying Death Star? We’ve got STAR WARS: A NEW HOPE.
And
let’s not forget the greatest logline in all of movie history: Transported to a
surreal landscape, a young girl kills the first person she meets and then teams
up with three strangers to kill again while trying to find her way back home.
You
guessed it . . . THE WIZARD OF OZ.
Happy
writing!